I tried making the tentacles more realistic, and I formulated the two middle tentacles into a broken heart. I left the rose green to reference the band's irish roots. I originally had the two feeler tentacles, but the composition seemed a little bit too crowded. I feel like the typographical elements are a little bit weak, so any help there would be very much appreciated.
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This is great, I honestly am not sure what you could do differently. I think this works out well, it grabs your attention.
hi gil,
i think this poster looks really cool. it looks like it could be screen printed. nice job.
you say you feel like the typographical elements are weak so i tried to think of some suggestions:
there are many swirls in your overall composition, so maybe if you were to incorporate that free movement... (water/wave-like) to the text on the left side, just so it's not so stiff. maybe it just needs a few small curves and bends. for the text under the band name.... perhaps you could trail that info on the tentacles. and i feel like the band name is totally fine.
hope that helps a bit. have a good weekend!
I like this a lot. I think you could put more suction cup things on the tentacles to make them look more like tentacles. I also think that the blue texture background should be spread more towards the left (more even), I don't like the angle it's on--to me it seems misplaced.
As for your text, I think Danielle's idea is good. Try putting it down that left tentacle. Or, do you even need to put that info? Other than that, I might bold the info or use a slightly thicker font, or as least enlarge it slightly--it sort of gets lost in that white flecks texture with white font--not much, just something to consider.
I think this looks awesome, I love the way you drew and colored the tentacles and rose. The background is interesting and you used a nice texture. I agree that the band name looks good, though maybe you could make the rose a little smaller and enlarge the font? That might help it stand out more. I also like the way the background 'box' veers inwards on the bottom left, maybe you can expand on that area to draw your eye to the text.
Gil,
The illo is tight. It looks much better…but I'd agree—it needs more suction cups! Even if you can add more like you have on the left side of the one holding the rose, it'll help.
Yes, the type is weak. It seems very haphazardly added. The Flogging Molly type is pretty solid, but the other type is poorly placed and doesn't look great. Flip-flop the hierarchy so opening act/other bands are more important than venue/time/etc. I'd either go all the way integrating the type and making it part of the illo, or keep it set type and offset the illustrative nature of everything else.
I'd push the green a little more blue to make it more nautical, and I'd not make the background shape bend like that. Uneven? Sure. But having it tilt like that doesn't help. The more rigid it is, the more expressive the squid and rose will be.
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